英语二作文1纯手打，求指教，

陈洁80

Im very happy to inform you that there is going to be a charity sale for kids in need of help on Tuesday,October23rd.The sale which is devided into three parts will start with the speech of our headmaster. After that, we are going to sell some fabulous stationary that are donated by some kind hearted teachers.Finally,we will caculate the amount of money we get.One portion of the money will de used to buy some books for the kids who is living in the poor villege,while the other portion of it will be for the kids with illness.Not only can you help the little kids but also you can buy something you really like at the sale.Remember that if people could give a little concer to others,the world would be a better place to live in.Looking forward your participation.

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陈洁80

concern 打错了look forward to

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一张汇款单

时间地点号召。漏了要求扣分很严重。

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xhwb

你可以用批改网，效果不错哟

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复旦隔壁

*一分怕你骄傲[龇牙笑]

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陈洁80

xhwb 发表于 2017-11-30 18:56
你可以用批改网，效果不错哟

好的，谢谢提醒

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xhwb

不客气。