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荒原。 · 发表于 2014-10-19 11:02

（还是打一下吧，拍照感觉不是很清楚。）
      The pictures above does demonstrate certain thought-provoking social phenomenon. In the left cartoon stands a pretty young woman, who is in a fashionable dress, throwing a banana pericap on the ground.  On the contrary, a disabled man who has only one leg hardly picking up the peer thrown by that girl. And below the drawings, there is a topic which means: the real beauty is from action rather than appearance.
         The symbolic meaning shown above is to tell us that importance should be attached to inner beauty. Unfortunately, in no country other than China,is the problem of public morals more serious. The modern citizens pay much attention to cosmetic, fashionable clothes and pretty faces, while ignoring to cultivate their moral character, morality and personality. Unfortunately, the traditional and modern virtues is indispensable for the harmonious society construction, but the situation is that many of us have not realize the essence of it. Were there trend to continue as it is, we would pay the high price.
         It is imperative that we enhanced the real sence of the significance of inner beauty than outlook. Specifrcally speaking, more campaigns should be imitated to promote peoples awareness. I have abundant confidence that with our real recognition and shared efforts we will creat a brighter social future.

（麻烦老师点评哦，万分感谢！）

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荒原。 · 发表于 2014-10-19 11:24

荒原。发表于 2014-10-19 11:02
（还是打一下吧，拍照感觉不是很清楚。）
The pictures above does demonstrate certain thought- ...

最后一段有个单词打错了，是initated 不是 imitated, in no country other than China后面加一句 it has been said that,再加 is the problem more serious
一着急打错了

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爱吃草莓的小子 · 发表于 2014-10-19 11:54

写的可能不太好，麻烦老师点评一下，谢谢老师！
   Having captured our attention,the above two pictures has shaped sharp contrast to each other.In the left picture, a girl who wears a beautiful skirts throw the rubbish on the ground.In another , a disabled man picks up the rubbish and places it into the dustbin.Simple as the drawing is, its intended  meaning is extremely thought-provoking and meaningful
   what is dispicted in the picture is to show us that it goes without saying that the beauty is not superficial.Someone wearing an elegant clothes may decline the moral line.On the contrary, people who have a kind heart are really beautiful,even if they are poor and haven't pretty appearance.Throwing rubbish everywhere , which is not uncommom phenonmenon,should be paid more attention of our society. Environment belongs to everyone and we all have a responsibility to protect it. what's more , we wouldn't have a good mood ,if the rubbish were thowed away everywhere.
   The problem is evident, and what seems crical and urgent is to find out approaches to solve it.On the one hand,effective measures should be taken by the government to arouse the public awareness of protecting environment . On the other hand,the general public should relize the importance of protecting environment.Only endeavored by the whole society ,  will our society be better and harmonous

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