世纪高教《写作高分突破热点话题100篇》作文修改专贴

momolili331

温室花朵那篇~
A big contrast is shown in the above pictures. It is raining heavily outside and a flower in greenhouse grows without any influence and remains pretty. However, when moved outside, the flower, without protection, withers and nearly dies. The flower kept in greenhouse can never survive the harshness.
The picture conveys a deep concern about children who born after 1980s and 1990s. They grow up in a society where economy develops extraordinarily fast and never undergo difficulties. As a result, they have no capability to deal with challenges and problems that come from life on their own. What’s more worrisome, they will be the future of our country.
To tackle the concern, we should spare no efforts to change it. To build an environment where independence is encouraged is the key to change the youngsters’attitude towards distress. In addition, families and schools should join their efforts help kids improve their abilities of approaching and coping with adversity and failure. Only through these ways can we ensure a better life and brighter future for the young generation.
今年黄宝书、作文、150篇都买了~~
作文书感觉很好~最近在看词义转换和多样短语那里~争取最后来点亮点词汇~

晴天3287

P294的就业问题，序列号发站短消息啦，谢谢老师！！请给我评分
A picture jumps into our sight when we take a look to the test paper .In this cartoon .A job-hunting girl waves her hand to refuse a service post ,complaining that she will never take a job of serving others .The drawing subtly reflects an incorrect attitude towards employment among Chinese job seekers.
This phenomenon ,what we find in the cartoon ,can easily be found anywhere in our daily life ,especially on campus .There are several driving forces behind this trend .On the one hand ,many job-seekers are reluctant to take jobs that they consider to be humble and trivial ,such as being a secretary or an assistant ,while hoping to ride on the peak of success .However ,what is amazing is that they are not conscious that ambition is to be achieved step by step .On the other hand ,waiting to gain more but pay less ,lots of students want to seek a job that is well-paid ,relaxed and comfortable .From what is mentioned above ,we can draw the conclusion that the problem of hunting jobs for college graduates is increasingly serious.
Consequently ,to solve the problem ,some measures should be taken .First and foremost ,an education campaign should be launched to popularize the idea that "the longest journey starts with a single step "and cultivate a down-to-earth attitude toward life .Besides ,the tendency of being lazy must be left from the mind of the young .Last but not least ,the new awareness that all jobs are equal in dignity and that fame and excellence can be reached to any occupation should be promoted in the whole society.

caoguangxia2011

回复 peterzjf 的帖子

谢谢老师的批改，下面请您帮我再批改下09年的大作文（卡号序列号密码上次已发过，序列号是C1006420卡号2405236093）
   From the simple but compelling cartoon above we can see many people surfing on the net,which seems to be common around us .It is obvious that the drawer of this picture wants to draw our attention towards the near and far of the net clearly, this is an important lesson of life we should learn.
  The symbolic meaning of the picture subtly conveyed should be given deep consideration.It is universally acknowledged,over the past decade ,that more attention has been attracted to this phenomenon. Based on the latest statistics providedby China Daily,people in mounting numbers come to realize the significance of the net.I can think of no better cases than the following ones. To begin with,the apparent example is that some people make friends with the net, in addition, they have exchange of information with the net. On the contrary ,many college students always thow themselves intocomputer games. Therefore,the advantages and disadvantages of the net depends on our attitude towards the net.
Judging from all evidence offered,we may saflely come to the conclusion that the net is both a blessing and a curse. We need to take some measures, on the one hand,wecan communicate with each other with the net, on the other hand,we should control ourselves to avoid throwing into the net. Only in this way,we will make good use of the net and make the world more harmonious.

sisiyu001

老师我又来麻烦您了，高分写作突破热点小作文之抱怨医院的

Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing to express my dissatisfaction about an unfair phenomenon in your hospital. Yesterday, I went to your hospital for my headache. After paid for the fee of registering,I went to the line for my turn.At the beginning,most of the people are in orderly row, But after a while,some people suddenly rushed into the front and entered the doctor’s office by paying the extra money.I and the other patients are very angry, but unbelievablely, the doctor checked up them immediatedly.
As we know,hospital should be a place with justice.But now,I can not find it in your hospital.I am sure you will agree the view above,and if you could make some relevant plans or rules to solve this problem,I will be much greatful.

                                                              Yours Sincerely,
                                                              Li ming