考研写模版能得几分？

xiaoch1222

模板作文得0分？？不要吓我啊···

luojun860609

他的意思是不要完全照搬 模板……
建议大家适当运用和改编模板，  变成是自己的东西。

蜘蛛舞

死套的话肯定不高，同样套模板，境界不一样啊~~

蜘蛛舞

原帖由 luojun860609 于 2009-1-5 17:58 发表


应该不会一样，现在我也是改模板，没办法英语基础差，交了几篇给老师改，都是9分的样子，郁闷，我目标是大小作文20分，这样过线就轻松一点。大家一起努力吧
刚改写的08年真题
As is shown in the picture, two disabled people a ...

觉得已经写的不错了~~~考试能发挥这样已经不容易了

lulu雨

[em:15] 我作文真的好烂啊。。
目标大小作文15分。。
但是听完大家说的。。
貌似改得很严的样子啊。。。
怎么办？呜呜

yhl7383

[em:15]

jmnb

还好上来看了下 今天背了模板 [em:37] 得重新自己写了

luojun860609

原帖由 wxhhkhl 于 2009-1-5 22:54 发表
去死吧,写那么好才9分,骗谁啊,那我还不得就3 .4 分了，晕!

晕，SORRY,我要重申一下，我是说我交给  老师改的 改编模板的作**是9分，这篇老师还没有改，因为之前交上去的作文，句子老师都说有语法错误，或者就是逻辑上的问题。
说实话，我交了几篇都是差不多的，个人感觉还不错，但老师批改下来就是这么低分。可能很多细微的错误自己感觉不出来，或者是模板的痕迹太重。
希望大家不要因此受打击，努力取得好成绩，一起加油！

luojun860609

As is shown in the picture, two disabled people abandon their stings (sting的意思是“刺，蜇，叮”用词错误，修改为sticks), helping each other, running to their common destination quickly (句式调整为and run to their common destination quickly with helping each other). The caption at the bottom states that they will travel from north to south with their combined legs.
Apparently, the purpose of this picture is to emphasize the importance of cooperation. Owing to the quick pace of life, competition goes increasingly fierce in all walks of life, stimulating everyone to be united to pursue their goals. The past few years have proved that cooperation is the key to victory. A case in point are (主谓一致is) the world famous star hurdler Liu Xiang, and his teacher (用coach更合适) Sun Haiping, (融和句错误，需另起一句) they work together and win lots of champions.
Personal experience leads me to conclude that the power of group is bigger than that of individual. As the saying goes, two heads are better than one. Although we will encounter no fewer difficulties as we stride ahead. But we are confident in our cooperation to overcome them and arrive at our set goal triumphantly.

评析：
本文对图画寓意的理解是正确的，段落结构比较清晰，语言表达通顺，句式上有一定的变化，个别长句不自然，用词基本准确。
这篇作文比之前有进步，望继续努力！
评分：11分