英语2作文1举行慈善义卖，求指教

陈洁80

让我通过吧，别审核了，手打不容易的，
Im very happy to inform you that there is going to be a charity sale for kids in need of help on Tuesday,October23rd.The sale which is devided into three parts will start with the speech of our headmaster. After that, we are going to sell some fabulous stationary that are donated by some kind hearted teachers.Finally,we will caculate the amount of money we get.One portion of the money will de used to buy some books for the kids who is living in the poor villege,while the other portion of it will be for the kids with illness.Not only can you help the little kids but also you can buy something you really like at the sale.Remember that if people could give a little concern to others,the world would be a better place to live in.Looking forward to your participation.

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孤鸿梦

文具应该是stationery，这里用复数stationeries

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孤鸿梦

第一句kids前加个the 表特指需要帮助的孩子

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孤鸿梦

第二句 The sale is devided into three parts and it will start with the speech of our headmaster.
which多余，删了。加个and it形成两个句子，不然一个句子里有两个动词是错的。

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孤鸿梦

第二句 The sale is devided into three parts and it will start with the speech of our headmaster.
which多余，。加个and it形成两个句子，不然一个句子里有两个动词。

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第二句 The sale is devided into three parts and it will start with the speech of our headmaster.

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孤鸿梦

which多余，删了。加个and it形成两个句子，不然一个句子里有两个动词是错的。

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calculate计算

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陈洁80

孤鸿梦 发表于 2017-11-30 16:00
文具应该是stationery，这里用复数stationeries

文具这个词我以为就像people一样，是个集体名词，其他的问题呢，你看出没有？

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陈洁80

孤鸿梦 发表于 2017-11-30 16:18
calculate计算

对，这个单词我写错了，谢谢，你读起来会不会觉得这个作文写得太简单太没水平了？

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