英语二大作文请亲们帮估个分

油浸沙丁鱼

扣分的话就是看你有几处错误了，你发中文我们怎么给你评判。语言第一位，内容第二位，这是王江涛说的

玮宗VICTOR

currytmac 发表于 2016-1-2 13:34
写什么不重要，关键是你的语法 表达 书写。。。拿篇汉语上来叫人给你估分，这就没什么意义了 ...

There are two major reasons to the boom in undergraduates traveling. On the one hand, the growing economy over the period made it possible for students to traveling. students are better off and their growing consuming power permits them to go outside to broaden their horizons. On the other hand, the maturing tourist industry has made traveling increasingly enjoyable. Travel agencies offer not only competitive prices but also satisfactory services, greatly stimulating the tourism market.
Students traveling has a positive effect on both individuals and society. Not only can the people have a better understanding of the culture in other cities, but the economy of tourist resorts also benefits. Moreover, the students are likely to become more open-minded, which is helpful for the progress of their own studies.



玮宗VICTOR

油浸沙丁鱼 发表于 2016-1-2 15:33
扣分的话就是看你有几处错误了，你发中文我们怎么给你评判。语言第一位，内容第二位，这是王江涛说的 ...

There are two major reasons to the boom in undergraduates traveling. On the one hand, the growing economy over the period made it possible for students to traveling. students are better off and their growing consuming power permits them to go outside to broaden their horizons. On the other hand, the maturing tourist industry has made traveling increasingly enjoyable. Travel agencies offer not only competitive prices but also satisfactory services, greatly stimulating the tourism market.
Students traveling has a positive effect on both individuals and society. Not only can the people have a better understanding of the culture in other cities, but the economy of tourist resorts also benefits. Moreover, the students are likely to become more open-minded, which is helpful for the progress of their own studies.



油浸沙丁鱼

玮宗VICTOR 发表于 2016-1-2 16:56
There are two major reasons to the boom in undergraduates traveling. On the one hand, the growing  ...

大哥写作文写的不错，我只看有一个地方有点不对劲，reasons for ..

玮宗VICTOR

油浸沙丁鱼 发表于 2016-1-2 17:53
大哥写作文写的不错，我只看有一个地方有点不对劲，reasons for ..

王江涛书里是这么写的，我主要是担心我没就欣赏风景和缓解压力这两点展开来写，你说这样能打多少分？北京考区的

油浸沙丁鱼

玮宗VICTOR 发表于 2016-1-2 17:56
王江涛书里是这么写的，我主要是担心我没就欣赏风景和缓解压力这两点展开来写，你说这样能打多少分？北京 ...

我看这语言是没有什么问题，而且那个，我考英语一，也不太懂你们是不是要考虑到要说的全面……

玮宗VICTOR

油浸沙丁鱼 发表于 2016-1-2 20:50
我看这语言是没有什么问题，而且那个，我考英语一，也不太懂你们是不是要考虑到要说的全面…… ...

好吧，谢谢亲

四百分同盟

玮宗VICTOR 发表于 2016-1-2 16:56
There are two major reasons to the boom in undergraduates traveling. On the one hand, the growing  ...

出分之后你可以查分,8-10吧。老师可以看出来你是背的,还有些错。

四百分同盟

四百分同盟 发表于 2016-1-5 01:37
出分之后你可以查分,8-10吧。老师可以看出来你是背的,还有些错。

而且关键,我觉得你很有可能跑题了。。。今年考得不是某校学生旅游原因调查么,你这个,只是沾边,不知道会不会老师觉得你跑题啊。

玮宗VICTOR

四百分同盟 发表于 2016-1-5 01:40
而且关键,我觉得你很有可能跑题了。。。今年考得不是某校学生旅游原因调查么,你这个,只是沾边,不知道会不 ...

对啊，我就担心这一点