自己写的英语大作文。。欢迎来喷。。

TWO宝

主题是  国内某个城市 旅游人数的变化。。是一个表格，第一行是  traveling 占得百分比 ，是一直增长的，第二行是 home 所占的百分比 ，是一直下降的。   下面是我写的 作文，，大家来点评一下 给个分数。。

From the table given above ,some remarkable changes have taken place with regard to the  style of enjoying the holiday in a city . Based upon the data provided , people who intend to schedule a travel have been on a significantly rise all the time .In the year of 2000,the percentage was only37% ,while within no more than several years , it went sharply up to 76% in2009 . meanwhile , those staying at home in holiday have witnessed a dramatic decline , reaching 24% in 2009.

So what should we conclude from the table  ? There are several contributing factors . At the top of the list , withthe rapid development of economy , more and more people can afford their traveling. According to an official report , approximately 60% of the families in bigcities have such financial resources to travel . In addition ,  the promotion of reform and opening-up has dramatically changed people s traditional thought that staying at home was thebest way to have a rest . Last but not least , one should not doubt the existenceof a fact that variety of culture never fails to fascinate domestic people .

Taking into account what has been argued above , I do hold that this phenomenon must be positive and healthy . the authorities concerned should play a positive role in guiding this trend.  

寒心诺

老蒋的模板吧，看见好多了，我现在都怀疑能用吗，哎

TWO宝

我也怀疑啊，把他的一些句子换了，只能这样啊。。担心怕扣分太多。。

tourstar

模板开头结尾一样，是可以用的，规范的作文格式都是差不多的，这不能算作弊什么的，现在的老师也都清楚的很

TWO宝

tourstar 发表于 2012-12-24 08:10  模板开头结尾一样，是可以用的，规范的作文格式都是差不多的，这不能算作弊什么的，现在的老师也都清楚的很 ...

我现在写的作文跟上面差不多，准备再改几个衔接句，担心大家都一样的套路分很低

深蓝紫苏

真的是全国人民都在用老蒋。。可是都这时候了，哪还有时间改啊。。。{:soso__*_2:}

huyang0824

。。。怎么和我的模版差不多。。。。。这还能用吗。。。老师不会看烦了吧。。。

TWO宝

huyang0824 发表于 2012-12-24 11:15  。。。怎么和我的模版差不多。。。。。这还能用吗。。。老师不会看烦了吧。。。  ...

其实，大家用的都是差不多的。。。这才是问题啊。。

beyond6

老蒋的改造的~

ytyharry

老蒋{:soso_e109:}大家都一样