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Leopard云豹 发表于 2011-11-24 21:33 ![]()
这句花貌似有问题:Spending too much time on the games not only results in failure in their study but ...
本句话摘自一篇考研英语范文
原文如下
Computer games
首段描述图画，揭示现象危害
As is vividly depicted in the picture, the schoolboy indulges himself in computer game.The most striking feature that impresses me deeply is that unbelievably, in class, he can not concentrate himself on what the teacher says, but just falls asleep dreaming about the thrilling computer games. Recently the phenomenon that the students suffer too much from homework burdens has aroused great concern and should be given enough consideration. This phenomenon of heavy burdens imposed on our students should be condemned severely or made illegal. There is no doubt that its symbolic meaning subtly conveyed should be given deep consideration.
中间段落从两方面论证问题的危害，并举例论证，预测 危害的趋势
To account for the above-mentioned phenomenon, several effects have been put forward. To begin with, spending too much time on the games not only results in failure in their study but also does harm to their health since they keep still in front of the computer and watch the computer without blinking the eyes. In addition, some unhealthy and violent information will tempt the children to act just like what is indicated in the game,which is a threatening situation we are unwilling to see. No better illustration of this idea can be thought than the example mentioned below .According to a survey made by China Daily, 63.93% of young people who are attached to computer games are in poor health or even drop out of school. If we cannot take useful means, we may not control this trend, and some undesirable results may come out unexpectedly, we will see the gloomy future of our students.
最后一段要强调解决问题，谈的两点建议通常是提高人们的意识，加强执法；
From what have been discussed above, it is therefore, necessary that some effective measures are taken to prevent the children playing the games. On the one hand, we should be sensible to strengthen the enforcement of the laws to protect the students. On the other hand, it is demanding for us to keep people aware of the importance of saving the students out of the evil hands of the internet bars. However, it is easier said than done. Practice is the most important factor. Only when you attention to it can you see a colorful and harmonious future better sooner or later.
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发表于 2011-11-23 14:50
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