求高人修改或指点。。。经我完善后的英文自我介绍

FlyFish213

本人英语基础不好，特别是语法部分，英文自我介绍虽有很多模板参考，但自己填完还是觉得有不少地方怪别扭的
求修改，不胜感激！
因为有的部分是模板，所以我只把自己觉得别扭的地方点列下来。。。

1.I have already passed CET-6 in July 2010.In the past half year I have been preparing for the postgraduate examination by rent a room which near an university. Actually this is my second time to take part in the exam for the dream of Suzhou University.

2.Life is precious. It is necessary to seize any chance for self-development, especially when you realize what is your really like.

3.as an old saying goes, actions speak louder than words. Right here, I only want to say I am open-minded and very fond of Psychology.


4.I like reading books, especially those about literature and geography. Of course, besides psychology.
In addition, during my college years, I had been three consecutive years of table tennis champion of our college. The process of competition make me have a better mentality when I face difficultes and pressure,moreover,the process of training make me more persevering when I determined to do something.

5.I will spare no effort to master a good command of advance
Applied Psychology.


非常感谢！
可以QQ联系的话我的号是307226462
发邮箱的话是xiaoyu.sponge@gmail.com

FlyFish213

自己顶一下，别沉了啊，*

FlyFish213

我顶。。。
英语高人已经睡了么。。。

sumile

be1.I have already 去掉passed CET-6 in July 2010.In the past half year I have been preparing for the postgraduate examination by rentinga room which isnear an university. Actually this is my second time to take part in the exam for the dream of Suzhou University.

2.Life is precious. It is necessary to seize any chance for self-development, especially when you realize what is去掉 your really like.

3.as an old saying goes, actions speak louder than words. Right here, I only want to say I am open-minded and very fond of Psychology.


4.I like reading books, especially those about literature and geography. Of course, besides psychology.？In addition, during my college years, I had been three consecutive years of table tennis champion of our college. The process of competition make sme have a better mentality when I face difficultes and pressure,moreover,the process of training makes me more persevering when I determine to do something.

5.I will spare no effort to master a good command of advance
Applied Psychology.

FlyFish213

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十分感谢！
不过，那个过六级的那个，去掉 have already 么？前面的be 是怎么个加法呢？困惑中。。。

sumile

前面没有be,不用加，是我打错了，还有六级那个按你的叙述应该是一般过去式，而不应该用完成式，如果你想用完成式那就直接是I have already passed CET-6.不要在后面加年份。

FlyFish213

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那是不是可以说I was passed CET-6 in +年月？

raozicheng

高人没睡  我睡了

sumile

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这个不行，Be*-ed是被动语态，你就说I passed CET-6 in***. 呵呵，我不是高手，我也是在准备复试。

13cc

I  passed cet-6 in July 2010. In the past half year I have been preparing for the postgraduate examination by renting a room which near the university.  This is my second time to take part in the exam for the dream of Suzhou University.


Life is precious. It is necessary to seize any chance for self-development, especially when you realize what  you really like.

as an old saying goes, actions speak louder than words. Right here, I only want to say I am open-minded and very fond of Psychology.



I like reading books, especially those about literature and geography.In addition,during my college years,i had been the table tennis champion of our college for three consecutive years.The process of competition
provides me with a better mentality when i face difficulties and pressure,moreover,the process of training makes me persevere more whem i am  determined to do something.


I will spare no effort to master a good command of advanced applied psychology.