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[size=4]My friend give me this picture and asked me if I could write some thing about it .I really want to write something even he didn't tell me a single word about it .I just want to have a try ,maybe i can write a novel use my imagination .Maybe after these words i can't write one more single word, hehe
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I know this is a quiet place , just several friends of mine came to see my words .So , no matter how awfully terrible I write the words about this picture ,no one would laugh at me ,even the owner of this picture ,i think .
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So ,let me think for a while ,maybe the "a while" is really long ,hehe
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Somehow , I want to see the words about this picture very much .
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Ok ,maybe tomorrow ,maybe never the words can be finished .
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[size=4]感谢[color=Magenta]zephyr[/color] ，感谢一[color=Magenta]杯清荼[/color]和[color=Magenta]美丽的花蝴蝶[/color]的热心帮助！修改后是这个样子，还有错误吗？请朋友们继续指教！[/size]
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[size=4]My friend give[color=Magenta](gave这里give要用过去式gave,因为你后面用了连词and后是asked.(ask的过去式,时态前后要统一.)
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(另外请注意第三称单数,动词要加"s" 所以 my friend后要用gives)[/color]me this picture and asked me if I can [color=Magenta](could) [/color] write some thing about it .I really want to write something even[color=Magenta](although从你的前后句来看,这里even 要改为although/though. 因为是转折关系,不是递进。)[/color] he didn't tell me a[color=Blue] single [/color]word about it .I just want to have a try ,maybe i can write a novel use[color=Magenta](using)[/color]my imagination .Maybe after these words i can't write one more [color=Blue]single这里的single word 是指”一个单词吗?” 一个单词, 只要说. a/one word 就可以了.
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Just for kill[color=Magenta](killing 这里kill 要用killing, for relaxing 介词for后面用名词/名词性的词/短语.这里for后面三个是平行的.所以注意词性的统一.)[/color] time ,for fun ,for relax[color=Magenta](relaxing),[/color]so just have a try .
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I know this is a quiet place , just several friends of mine[color=Magenta](would come 这里是在说带有一种假定,所以came 要用would comehere)[/color] to see my words .So , no matter how awfully terrible [color=Magenta]（这里terrible 要用其它副词, terribly,因为你是用how来感叹动词write,所以修改动词要用副词.）[/color]I write the words about this picture ,no one would laugh at me ,even the owner of this picture ,i think [color=Magenta](. no matter how terribly I write .I wish anyone ,even the owner of this picture ,would not laugh at me)[/color]
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So ,let me think for a while ,maybe the "a while" is really long[color=Magenta](time) [/color],hehe
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Somehow , I want (would like )to see the words about this picture very much .
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Ok ,maybe tomorrow ,maybe never the words can be finished [color=Magenta].( never and better words about it could be showed here)[/color]
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Who knows ?! [color=Magenta]（Who would like to help me?）[/color][/size]
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