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朋友们,在这里写下你们的英语短文吧

persuiting  the beautiful dreams, facing the hardship of life ,you will be confident of yourself; wiriting your english essay,  you can become better and better.although we would not perhaps have a skillful operating in english ,we would have a reason to believe ourselves :we will get a successful way which  attributes to our struggling.

写得比以前好多了啊！

would not perhaps 这个搭配怎么这么别扭哇。（我的英语很差，请其他的同志说说）

[quote]原帖由 [i]liuzhongtao1234[/i] 于 2006-7-1 10:30 发表
would not perhaps 这个搭配怎么这么别扭哇。（我的英语很差，请其他的同志说说） [/quote]
[em:43][em:43]我的英语就这么差,没办法,每天都会来献丑的,我曾经专门请了个英语老师,现在他戒网了,哎,下次就请你啦.[em:36][em:36][em:36][em:36][em:36][em:36]

“persuiting  the beautiful dreams, facing the hardship of life ,you will be confident of yourself;”This is the most  wondfull sentence that Ihave like .

never too old to learn

it is a vivid picture to spark our imaging that we have a plenty of dreams in our mind. there is certainly that the harder we study the closer we will be towards to my dreams.so i say:never too old to learn.
  along with societal growth is people's increased perception that contributes to more  demands for better living standards. we hope taking charge of the better living than the past,that is , we have a reason to fighting for our  brilliant future.it is a successful way that we have a plenty of knowlege,skills,experiences which attributes to studying hard.
  fistly, it would be significant if our studies are being  used efficiently.perhaps we have no sufficient  times to study every day.this is due to our identities that all of us are housewives.we have perhaps spent a plenty of times to tutor our children,and to watch TV with our relations such as husband. making a thorough scheme for ourselves,this would aid ourselves to perform task every day.we might be surprised at our progresses which even if a little.
  secondly, we must fullfill our tasks of studying along with our great effors.we have a reson to believe we can do better than others.because we belong to ourselves,belong to our great dreams.nothing is impossible.somethin is possible. we would be successful if we have a positive attitude.please believe ourselves:we can change our fates,and we can take charge of our future.
  never too old to learn,harder and harder,we can get the brilliant future,please congratulate ourselves!!!!

[em:36][em:36][em:42][em:42]

[quote]原帖由 [i]liuzhongtao1234[/i] 于 2006-7-1 10:30 发表
would not perhaps 这个搭配怎么这么别扭哇。（我的英语很差，请其他的同志说说） [/quote]
可以改成:although we would perhaps have  no skillful operating......
or:  although we would perhaps have a lot of incorrect  ways to express ourselves.
请朋友们看看,可不可以?

i have spent one hour online.i must leave.
please wait for me to giving you the great essays,let's possess a pleased time to study english.my friends,byebye!!!

[quote]原帖由 [i]慕荣谷[/i] 于 2006-7-1 14:25 发表

可以改成:although we would perhaps have  no skillful operating......
or:  although we would perhaps have a lot of incorrect  ways to express ourselves.
请朋友们看看,可不可以? [/quote]
我认为这样也可以---
although,perhaps,we would have no skillful.............

感觉慕容谷比我好多了，随手就能写，你每天都练习写作吗？

[quote]原帖由 [i]慕荣谷[/i] 于 2006-7-1 12:06 发表

[em:43][em:43]我的英语就这么差,没办法,每天都会来献丑的,我曾经专门请了个英语老师,现在他戒网了,哎,下次就请你啦.[em:36][em:36][em:36][em:36][em:36][em:36] [/quote]
呵呵，第一我的英语很差，特别是不会写文章。第二，昨天收到通知书了我要开始我的新学期学习准备了，我不会再来论坛了。也许还会来潜水看看。谢谢你对我的信任和高看。
  考研妈妈们再见了。拉拉再见，我想你已经从过去的阴影中摆脱出来了，祝愿你一路好运。祝愿07年的考研妈妈们都能如愿。当然要想如愿，还是要控制好上网时间滴。[qq:20]
[qq:39][qq:39][qq:39]

给人修改英语文章时特别麻烦的事情，我其实也不愿意做。你可以来看看，愿意的话就提出一两个小错误，或者说几句鼓励的话，任何一个回贴都是大家的希望，希望你常来！

i don't write a composition every day,this is due to the busy.

应该说 because  i am busy,i can ont write……你那样说不正确。

selecting some of  mistakes which I think they are.........

there is certainly-------why use "certainly"?
will be towards to my dreams---------- toward to???????  don't gild the lily........
along with -----along  or Along?
hope taking ??? you can use this kind of style: hope to do or have the hope of doing.......it is seldom to see" hope doing "......

my opinion,only for reference...........

[[i] 本帖最后由 冰冷无罪 于 2006-7-4 01:22 编辑 [/i]]

I want to write but have not enough courage !I think I should follow"muronggu",otherwise,I don't know how I would face the writing in the examination!

the impact of pollution

pollution is the price we pay for the over-industrialized city. there's no denying that many people appreciate the development of economy. along with economic growth is people's increased income that contributes to better living standards. perhaps when you come to think about it , you will ignore the fact that our planet is becoming worse and worse in the environment. we pay a high a price for the industrial growth.
  at the first place, that is responsible for the rubbish of city, the exhaust of industry and the noise  which is transmitting everywhere. perhaps these will drive us mad. most of us is easily sick for the various diseases in the worst environment than ever. we can have a indubitable doubt that how we improve our health. what's more ,pollution has damaged the ecology of our planet.for example,the need of produce ever-increasing quantities of cheap food leads to a different kind of pollution. the use of pesticides is becoming serious,the exhaust of industry makes expanding pollution,the atmosphere is full of the poison gas and so on. the biodiversity is declining which attributes to  pollution . it really matter if there are the least species in the world . we must improve the environment so that the diverse ecosystem is stable. conversely, the fewer species have no balanced ecology capable of sustaining life on earth.
  in short ,pollution has a warning to persuade us improving our environment,it is important to enhance our capability and we must have a efficient action to do better than last .

[quote]原帖由 [i]renjunzu[/i] 于 2006-7-4 08:54 发表
I want to write but have not enough courage !I think I should follow"muronggu",otherwise,I don't know how I would face the writing in the examination! [/quote
renjunzu, please join us with the writing.i  have made a plenty of mistakes for my  composition .i hope that my english teach have a look at my mistakes.thanks  a lot!! [em:36][em:36][em:36][em:36][em:36][em:36]

[quote]原帖由 [i]冰冷无罪[/i] 于 2006-7-4 01:21 发表
selecting some of  mistakes which I think they are.........

there is certainly-------why use "certainly"?
will be towards to my dreams---------- toward to???????  don't gild the lily. ... [/quote]
thank you very much.but can you point to the mistakes more thoroughly?
welcome you  to come here, but you know ,you will face a foolish student ,are you full of confident?
wish you always a happy time .
i appreciate my english teacher ,because he helps me.i will remenber his help deeply.

小慕,我们可以从背诵模仿开始训练英文写作.

多读多练，水平不知不觉就提高了！！

坚持就是胜利！！

Preseverance means success!!

Introduce my family

I have a happy family, I am a five little girl’s mother, and i have a good husband, we love each other, I always feel happy.
If you come to my home, we will welcome you very much. Imaging my little daughter, she will be certainly give you a bear hug. She is always hospitable. It is true that she fetch a lot of delicious foods to you, and she will invite you to play a funny game. I believe you could have a good time with us. We will enjoy ourselves.
My husband always has a good tendency. We almost have no a quarrel. My husband can endure me, particularly when I am angry with him. I appreciate my husband deeply, because he so love me. I feel guiltily that I always blame him.
I am twenty-eight, I have a good dream that I would become a post-graduate. I will pay for more efforts. I hope to do better than last years. Never too old to learn. Please believe me that I will be successful.

我的英语很差，简直动不了笔，所以我喜欢看你写的作文，想从中学习.我觉得你的句子有些很汉语化，不英语表达，但要我改，可能又改不好.也望其他人指正:1.＂I am a five little girl’s mother＂是不是可以换成"I am a  mother of 5 years oid girl "; 2."we love each other"是不是可以换成I love him and so does he.
3.If you come to my home, we will welcome you very much是不是可以换成you are welcome  to my home wheneve you like .
现丑了，我也不知道是否正确.

"I am a  mother of 5 years oid girl ＂好象也有问题，但我不知道如何改，请教路过此地的高手指正！

我的英语连初中生也不如,我好想哭啊.

不好意思！第二句好象也有问题,这样改如何？I have a good husband which I deeply love  and he also love me .

[quote]原帖由 [i]renjunzu[/i] 于 2006-7-6 19:58 发表
不好意思！第二句好象也有问题,这样改如何？I have a good husband which I deeply love  and he also love me . [/quote]
谢谢你,你改得很好,我会多多发些烂作文上来的,多谢朋友们啦.

能写这么多，很不错的！而且有些句字表达很好！不要灰心，我们一起努力，我还不知从何练起！

Should we love the cars or hate them?

Along with economic growth is people’s increased income that contributes to better living standards. Perhaps owning the car seems to be a dream before. Nowadays we can approach the dream. The car are no longer a real luxury for most of the people in china. Most of us are capable of buying a car. Should do we love the car or hate them?
  The use of car is general. Car makes our life more convenient. You know, you can spend less time than before to get a certain locality, and the trip will be pleased. You needn’t crowd into the bus, and you can go somewhere whenever you like. People appreciate the car, costing more to purchase the car. A conclusion can be reached that the living standards of the people have improved by a big margin.
  Unfortunately, the car also makes a lot of matters to the people. People will face the problems of the traffic jams. Sometimes, the incidence of accident is higher than the era which has no cars. Air pollution and noise pollution caused by cars do harm to our health. People are worried about the safety and the health. Most of us turn the attitude to hate the influence of cars. We have begun to improve the environment which is polluted.
  In fact, all things have dual characters. We can praise the positive effect and reduce the bad influence. For example, we can build the sufficient overpasses to avoid the traffic jams. We believe we can make a lot of measures to tackle the problems. The effective steps will do better than ever. Accompanying the increasing numbers of cars , we have a reason to enjoy ourselves.